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| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Just tired  PLOT - A couple sit in almost complete darkness watching a candle burning and discuss their relationship as it's ending, trying to make sense of where it all went wrong. SETTING - Good visuals of the candle light, the wax taking over the flame as they sat surrounded by darkness. Her tear falling at the end as the light went out was perfect. GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE - Memories rushed to the front of his mind, Dialog was good. The internal thoughts worked well too. THOUGHTS - The ending of a relationship is never easy and you portrayed that well as they sat talking about it. I didn't expect to be pulled into it so well with such a short word count, but you used your words well. It's amazing how both can see things differently, or not at all for that matter. When she confesses that she wanted a love like the one he had with someone else, only to find out that he never wrote that card, but her ex did was a shock. I felt so bad for her, and for him. To think she broke up with Mike over a letter he wrote for his friend seeking that kind of love, only to learn it never came from the guy she waited for is bittersweet. What a twist of events. Nicely done. Write on!   
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