Hi 🌑 Darleen - QoD ,

A "Game of Thrones"  House Martell Review!

Form:

Your poem is based on the cascade. In a traditional cascade each line of the first stanza is the last line of subsequent stanzas; however, in your version, each line of the first stanza is the first line of subsequent stanzas.

Just like the traditional cascade, there is no rhyme scheme and there is no fixed meter.

First impression and image:

I rummage through your port expecting to find darkness everywhere I turn, but what do I find from the person who runs Dark Dreamscapes? A shining light, and deep and meaningful words.

This is a beautiful poem, Darleen. I really like the imagery of the tree representing our inner-selves.

The image you have chosen is a nice visual link to your poem. It serves to show us the inspiration in your poem, and is also something tangible for us to refer to when reading.

General impressions:

It was easy to see the images you created in each stanza. Your first stanza brilliantly sums up your poem, and the meanings in its words really do cascade throughout your poem.

You have done a great job of linking the various parts of the tree to the parts of humanity.

I noticed that you have nothing in the dropnote where I assume you mean to explain what the requirements of the Cascade form are. This is the only thing you need to sort, and it a very minor thing.

Thank you for sharing your work with us! Write On!


Lord Andy~Sunspear of Martell




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