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A Legal Lay…  [13+]
A cute answer to our national debt... :-)
by Robin:TheRhymeMaven
Review of A Legal Lay…  
Review by Kit
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Robin:TheRhymeMaven ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

*Laugh* I love this poem! And you're not wrong!

This poem made me giggle. You are right, though. I don't understand why prostitution is not legalised. It would bring money into the coffers, there would be better oversight, less of a risk of ladies being forced into negotiable affection against their will... And as you say, it happens anyway! Isn't it what is called the world's oldest profession?

I always love reading political poems. There are too few of them, I think. You made good points throughout, in an enjoyable tone and using nice, entertaining wording and imagery.

The poem has a pleasant rhythm and flow. It's well-presented and easy on the eye - always a bonus. And I love your use of punctuation, as this helps guide the reader and assists the overall clarity. Great job!

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions about the poem's content. I like it just the way it is. The only thing I'd suggest is allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

A great poem, that I am very happy I found.

I did have one suggestion, but that's more of a personal preference. So, I will still give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit

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