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Review of Future  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello, Sara♥Jean ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


I was searching for something to review from your portfolio when this particular poem caught my attention and I wanted to read it. The title of your poem was very good, it created a lot of suspense in the reader's mind as it wondered what the poem may be about on the theme of 'future' and for what specific aspect it was written. The short description made the reader question who the person might be to know that fear is coming and what might be in store for her or him.

The beginning of your work was very good, it gripped the reader's attention and made her be completely absorbed in it. I felt as a third person who could see the poet in slow motion getting on the knees, a sign of defeat, of failure, of accepting loss and no longer able to control all the burdens there are on her shoulders. I particularly liked the line about silence despite the pounding in the head, it evoked mixed emotions in the reader. The second stanza made me feel as if I was the victim myself as feeling of being suffocated came into my mind and I could imagine struggling to get free.

I think there are different interpretations to the way you ended your poem but the way I conceived the message was that future is scary for all of us, no one knows what might happen and it is natural to have fear but then you brace yourself, yoou strengthen yourself, pull up your socks and push that fear behind to move on, take on challenges head on. The flow of your poem was good, there was no interruption and it flew smoothly when I read it out loud. The vocabulary you used was strong, especially in the second stanza due to which it was my favourite from your poem.

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