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Review of Janie  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, OOT™ ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


I was searching for something to review from your 30 Day Image Contest when this particular story got my attention. The title of your work was based on one of the characters from the story so it automatically made the reader intrigued to know what kind of a story it might be about and who this Janie might be. The short description of your work was even more intriguing as I wanted to know what kind of a job she was doing and why the author had given the impression that she had left a lot of jobs and will find difficulty in the current one as well.

The story you had here was very interesting and caught the reader's interest right from the beginning as I wondered why the people in her office bullied her. It made me feel very sympathetic towards Janie as well as I could feel anger building within me for the coworkers that were continuously teasing her, irritating her. So many questions arose in the reader's mind as she wondered why she got out of the last two jobs and what would happen with her in this job. The way you had written the story was quite good and the reader was in for a surprise at the ending, I was not expecting the story to turn out the way it did. It was very good and emotional, it made the reader even more sympathetic and sad towards Janie and wondered how she would get past the fact that her mother had died. I had no idea what had been going on with her until the end.

Even though she realises her mother is dead, she still doesn't want to accept that and wants to keep her alive. The flow of your work was very good, there was no interruption and it was very smooth, there were no questions that arose in the reader's mind. There were no errors I found in your work. The characters you had here were very believable and realistic. Well done!


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