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 I Get It  [E]
For all the girls who thought they were in love in school - my first go at a poem
by Lady H
Review of I Get It  
Review by Shaye
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Lady H ,

I am Lorraine and I am reviewing your piece "I Get It"  in affiliation with "Simply Positive Review Forum " .

Title: It's a title that draws the reader in, without completely giving away what the content of the poem is. The use of first person also gives the reader a link to the author, you.

First Impression: An easy to read, very true poem. It flows quite well, and in the same way the title appeals to the reader, the first person use makes it feel as if you're actually talking to the reader.

Thoughts and Suggestions: First of all, always nice to see another British member of the site. I imagine a few American members might be slightly confused as to what "secondary school" is. *Bigsmile*

The actual content of the poem is good. It's something I think most girls at secondary school could do with reading. Probably 90% go through something like this, so it's a relatable topic to address.

This appears to be free verse, but you've personally tried to stick to some form of structure with the four line stanzas, each around 5-7 syllables. This gives the poem a regular rhythm and keeps the pacing steady. It's also written in such a way that, if a secondary school girl was reading this, she'd be able to understand it. You don't use difficult terminolgy, and your use of terms such as "fit" would ensure they could relate to it.

Spelling/Grammar: No errors spotted here!

Closing Thoughts: Overall, a good, enjoyable poem. A great poem, considering this is your first attempt! I hope you go on to write more poems! *Smile*

Lorraine


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