Hi drjim, I am Lorraine and I am reviewing your piece "Invalid Item" today in affiliation with "Simply Positive Review Forum " . Title: Only you could make what could have been a very generic title for a short stories folder and flip it on it's head. Quite literally here. Story Shorts has a nice ring to it, and is far better and eye-catching than Short Stories. Great title. Thoughts and Suggestions: I spent a long while travelling through your port, before ultimately deciding that I'd comment on a whole folderful of awesome stories, rather than just one. Short stories are my favourite type of writing to read, besides novels, so it's a shame you don't have a few more in here! I've obviously read and awarded your Spirit Eagle story. I'm curious, the title of it currently says Chapter One. Does that mean there's possibly more brewing? That story was well-crafted within a reasonably short time-frame. It was very enjoyable, and it did leave me wanting to read more. What is Spirit Eagle's destiny here? Hopefully more will be written so I can find out! The Rock Gods is also an enjoyable story. I'm curious as to where you're going with that one too! You've got a couple of first chapters hanging around, but no second ones. The readers need more than the first chapter! I admit, when I first read the title, I didn't think about literal rocks, my first thought was music-related. Spelling/Grammar: No errors spotted in the folder! And I don't recall spotting any in the stories I read within. Admittedly, I wasn't paying all that much attention to the grammar as I read. Put it this way, there's no very noticeable grammar errors; none that interrupted my reading enough for me to notice anyway. Closing Thoughts: Thanks for this folder full of entertaining reads. Now, go out there and write the second chapters to these stories with only a start, and not an end! Lorraine ** Image ID #2090473 Unavailable ** Listen, smile, agree, and then do whatever you were going to do anyway! Robert Downey Jr.
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