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 When I Get Older, Losing My Hair  [13+]
Margie finds that progress can be shocking.
by two of four
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello, two of four ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


I was searching for something to review from your portfolio for the WDC Game of Thrones when this particular story caught my attention and I wanted to know what you had here. The title of your work was very intriguing and the impression your title left on the reader was something like Margie would find out a white hair in her head and that would leave her surprised and afraid to realise that she is growing old. Expecting that, I continued to read the story and I must say, the way you had written your story was completely different and unexpected. The reader was definitely in for a surprise, having zero idea of how the story might turn out.

The plot you have here was very good, the advancement of technology, the new inventions and discoveries every single other day makes you feel progressed, moving on into a new era and yourself an alien to all those things. It must be this case especially for people who are old, born in the 50s or 60s. Your use of technology as the plot in your story was very interesting, a new concept and I hadn't read anything like this before so it appealed to me more. The characters you have here are nice, believable and realistic. You have shown the time to be way ahead, perhaps somewhere in the 2030s or afterwards when there is everything so automatic and computerized. I particularly liked how you told that it was Margie's 96th birthday which showed the reader how the health facilities had advanced to increase the life expectancy. It was perfect! I have no suggestion for your work.

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