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 The Mighty Pencil  [13+]
Astrid saves the world
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Review of The Mighty Pencil  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, two of four ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


I was searching for something to review from your portfolio for the WDC Game of Thrones when this particular story caught my attention and I wanted to know what kind of a story you had on the title "The Mighty Pencil." It made the reader get the idea that perhaps Astrid was a little girl and used her pen to write a story where she saves the world.

At a glance, I know right away if it is appealing on the page and is easy to read and understand. If it is in one huge paragraph, it becomes too difficult to read. But you had separated the story into paragraphs and the story looked neat and tidy and was read easily. A nice balance of imagery and well written word makes me feel as if I am there. The choice of words was good enough that the reader could imagine the whole situation.

There weren't a lot of dialogues in this story but still I enjoyed it and liked the way it is written and believe that it is better without any more dialogues. The flow of this story was good and everything went in sequence. Nice! My favourite part was the one when Astrid writes down the columns of 'Goodbye' and 'Hello' and how the whole situation was changed.

Overall, this was an excellent story. It had a unique and a very beautiful theme. I loved how Astrid was inspired by the saying of the author in the book and believed it. You told the story in such a beautiful way! It is my wish as well that peace rule the world and there is no fighting or bomb blasting. I really do wish that and this really increased my hope.

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