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Review of 55 word stories  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello, Sanita ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


While I was browsing through your portfolio, this particular item caught my attention. The title of your work was interesting because it gave the reader the exact idea to know what she would find inside this item. I really admire reading flash fiction and blink stories because they are simply fascinating! I am always amazed by the fact that a complete story can be made within 55 words or 100 words. When I saw these were fifty five word stories, I knew I had to come and take a peek at these.

Having a collection for such short stories was a good idea, it doesn't seem to long for the reader to read and then review and it is convenient to store all fifty five word stories in a single item. The first one labelled "Asylum" was very interesting because it hooked the reader right from the beginning as I wondered what would happen, only to realise that it was a creation of Lucy's mind and due to her hallucinations and fear of them, she had been admitted to the asylum. By the way you had written that she began to draw bear and a lion, I got the impression that she was a little girl but a little girl can't have been admitted to an asylum, or can she?

The second story was creepy and plain scary, she killed her own brother and I couldn't help but think she was going to kill her mother as well. The third was a good one, I really liked the way you had titled the story as "The Man in the Blue Sweater" that made the reader intrigued and wanting to know more about him. Of all the stories you have here, the last one had a hopeful and a positive theme which was a nice change! *Laugh*

I had only one suggestion for your work. Feel free to ignore it if you like. The red text is from your work whereas the green text is my personal suggestion for a possible edit.

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