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Where We End  [E]
A diamante poem.
by Choconut ~ House Targaryen
Review of Where We End  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Choconut ~ House Targaryen ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


Hey there again! When I was browsing through your poetry folder, this caught my attention because immediately, I thought, "Hey! I wrote a poem with the same title!" and when I wondered if there could be any similarity, I remembered that you might have entered it in Lexi's Poetry Contest where we have to write a poem on the titles given. Seeing a poem from a contestant, I automatically wanted to read what kind of a poem you had here.

The title you had chosen from the list was good, it has a dark and sad ring to it and gives the reader an impression that it is going to be about relationships and how they are no longer where they used to be. I, myself, wrote a similar poem focusing on a husband and a wife. You had quite a captivating poem here, Rachel. Using a diamante form and colours to write the opposite of what they used to be was highly effective and worked really well for your poem. It made me remember the very short stories I used to read on the internet, like four word stories one of which was : Strangers, Friends, Lovers, Strangers and I felt the same idea being presented here. You mention a word, the love blooming, the two of them getting married and then the exact opposite of what happened. It is emotional to note that nothing lasts forever and that two people who were once so in love are none more than mere strangers. Well done!

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