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Review of The Bike  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello, OOT™ ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


What a wonderful, nice story you have here! I had read most of your stories in the Christmas folder so I wanted to see the stories I hadn't read before in your 30 Day Image Contest folder and here I am! The title of your work was simple but had a mysterious ring to it because just reading it gave the reader an impression that it would be a story about a bike but what I didn't expect was how important it would be and special too. The short description you had provided the reader with made her feel warm and nice as I could feel the strong bond and love between the father and the son.

The beginning of your work is very good, I could relate to Derek's wish of having a car because all his friends had but I was really happy to read that he loved his parents and cared for them. Reading your story made me feel that there should be more people like Derek. Nowadays, due to the advancement in technology, parents are so away from their children and there is no such strong bond of love between them. I am not saying it has completely disappeared but there are a lot less people like Derek we might see today. Your story had a wonderful message of love and respect for their parents for the reader which I loved! The flow of your story was good, the starting was interesting as it captured the reader's interest and she wanted to know what kind of a bike it was and what it would be able to do for Derek. Wonderful! I found no errors in your work.

P.S with all the reviews I have sent you, I bet that would make an excellent 'Welcome Back' gift for you. *Wink* Miss you!

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