Hi Andy~hating university ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a powerful poem, dear Andy. I like the form you used as well.

The poem speaks of how desire can have unwanted consequences. The angel - a symbol of innocence and purity - overlooks the demon's evil, blinded by her passion for him. He, of course, knows what he is doing and leads her into his darkness - a fall from grace.

It's a perfect poem for the prompt you were given. The imagery is vivid, the wording strong. Your chosen form is interesting, and one I would like to try out myself one day, as it offers a lovely rhythm and rhyming scheme.

On the technical side of things, I enjoyed the flow of this piece. I also like your presentation - it's clean and easy on the eye. I love your use of punctuation, as this helps guide the reader and adds to the overall clarity of the poem. Overall, I think that you have done an excellent job.

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions, Andy. I didn't spot any errors, nor did I see anything that I felt you could improve upon. Your poem works for me.

My Rating:

This is a good poem. I enjoyed the read.

I had no suggestions, so I will give your item the 5 out of 5 rating it deserves.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



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