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 Flats and Flaws  [13+]
While on a road-trip, a couple comes across more than one kind of bump in their road.
by beetle
Review of Flats and Flaws  
Review by Starling
In affiliation with Cross Timbers Groups  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Title of Work: : Flats and Flaws (short story, Gay/Lesbian)
Author of Work: : Beetle
Date: : July 31, 2016

Plot:
"While on a road-trip, a couple comes across more than one kind of bump in their road."

Scene/Setting:
Shawn and his boyfriend are taking a road trip. They have just left Touson, where they had stopped to eat. There was a bigoted waitress and manager there. It is never made completely clear if they got their lunch.

When they reach a rather deserted stretch of road they have a flat tire. They discuss the reasons why they are now stuck out in the middle of a hot dusty nowhere, each thinking about blaming the other for the catastrophe. After their disagreement on who to blame, they figure they are not going to get help from anywhere else, but they are going to have to change the flat tire themselves. They started to pull their luggage, souvenirs and other things out of the trunk of the car. There isn't much because before the road trip they had made sure the truck would hold all of their things. Shawn is very surprised his boyfriend knows how to change a flat tire. The only possible problem is Shawn cleaned out the trunk and didn't think to put the jack back in. They were going to be stuck until someone came by.

Characters:
Shawn
Shawn's boyfriend

Suggestions:
This is a cute story. I can picture these two guys standing beside a very long vacant stretch of road. Most people take it for granted that if you are a guy, you know how to change a tire. It would be like if you were a girl, you should know how to cook. You did a very good joy of showing this myth.

Character Count: 1,390 (tags = 173 Characters above this point)
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