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Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello, OOT™ ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


The title of your story caught my attention because I enjoy reading love, romance stories and two young lovers appealed greatly to me as I wanted to know what kind of a story you had here. The title alone painted a beautiful image in the reader's mind as she imagined two young people sitting on a lake, spending the afternoon alone, watching the romantic nature scenery as well as spending time with each other. The title alone made the reader feel so nice, so she wanted to know what was inside your story too.

The beginning of your work was very good, it made the reader feel hopeful and nice, to see that Jason's love was being returned and the girl he liked wanted to spend some time with him too. The beginning set quite a nice mood and setting that made the reader hum a nice tone while reading the story. I can imagine how people struggle for their loved ones to acknowledge them back and then move towards the next step of the relationship. To know that he had been noticed by the girl he wanted to be noticed, I was delighted especially to see that he had prepared a poem for her. Such a romantic gesture! The place where the two of them met seemed like a perfect picnic spot for a young couple and I was expecting both of them to admit and confess their love and then have a happy ending. However, the ending you have here completely got the reader by surprise as I wasn't expecting it. I could feel Jason's heart being torn apart and so did mine as I realise that girls are very mean and cruel and are only nice to get something they want. It was often in dramas and rare manga I read that the girl got close to the boy so that he would introduce her to a friend of his or his brother. The sudden change in the tone and the mood was very influencing as it brought down the reader's mood. Well done! I found no error in your work.

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