I am reviewing for the Game of Thrones that is fixing to end on WDC. I am looking to help in this review not hinder. These are simply my recommendations, you don't have to use them if you don't want to.
The theme is the fact that our children are a blessing and gifts from God. This piece was easy to read through, although there are punctuation consistencies I recommend along with the removal of a few words. These are just my recommendations not anything you MUST do.
I do not understand NO. Why is the word no in this poem? To me it does not fit.
My son...me needs a comma or take out the space between word and comma.
that cross (move up to line above)
control (add comma)
My son path...already (add period.)
My son does not belong to e (me)
become too hard (add comma)
alone (add period.)

What does not fighting alone have to do with your son not being yours?
remember (add comma)
clear (add comma)
tears (add comma)
own (add period)

This is a good poem, I like the message and the reminder.
Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .