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 | Me and Dad and the Rosebush  [ASR] A tall but true tale from my younger days  |
| (5.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation  PLOT - Father and son off on another adventure, to tear away life in the form of trees and other shrubbery. This adventure has you crawling around a massive rosebush, trying to get a chain around it's base so it can be removed from the ground by your father and his Bedford. SETTING - I loved all of the internal dialog when it came to describing your father as a man of many words, or, not so many words. You trying to talk him out of making you wrap the chain around the rosebush was good, I had a really clear picture of that. But you and and that snake! Oh my that was hilarious, and scary at the same time. I cannot imagine how terrified you must have been then. CHARACTERS - The snake who is just as terrified as you were. You father, who gave you such a good glimpse of his affections for you, only to turn it around into something else. And you, unable to say no to your father, hating every second of the tasks he puts for you carry out, and of course these wonderful stories each one leads to. You have a great pace that really lets the reader get a clear picture as things progress. GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE - No spelling errors! Yea! Go you!! Again, great dialog. It's so easy to get into the story and the dialog always has me laughing at the way you and your dad talk to one another. THOUGHTS - Another great story. I loved this one. When you and the snake came face to face, which sent you off out of the rosebush like a shot of lightning, only falling onto your behind as you skidded away had me rolling. You always manage to paint a really vivid scene with your word choices. Love the humor of these tales. Thanks for sharing. Write on!   
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