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 Unnoticed Behavior  [GC]
A guy decides to cheat on his girlfriend. (shrink)
by Markus
Review by Starling
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Rated: GC | (4.0)
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Title of Work: : Unnoticed Behavior (short story, fantasy)
Author of Work: : Markus
Date: : July 31, 2016

Plot:
A guy decides to cheat on his girlfriend.

Scene/Setting:
Alex is working a summer job as a school teacher and Angela his girlfriend puts in a lot of hours at work also. There never seems to be enough time to spend quality time together. Alex gets home from work at about one o'clock one day, grabs a beer and goes on the internet. He has discovered he likes to watch porn. One of the people on there is known as Jenn. She doesn't live very far from him. She asks if he would like her to come over and cheer him up, because he has been telling her he is not happy with the way life is at the moment with his girlfriend. He agrees to have her come over, for just a little difference in his life. When she gets there, they talk and soon find themselves kissing. Jenn offers Alex a small pill and tells Alex if he takes it something will get a lot bigger and he will enjoy it. Alex takes the pill. He starts to feel dizzy but Jenn starts to really get hot and heavy with every part of his body.

Soon he is feeling very strange. It feels like she is touching his whole backside all at once. Soon he realizes he is shrinking. He panics but Jenn starts to tower over him and he can't get away from her. He shrinks to the size of her big toe. She picks him up and drops him into her panties where he slides down to between her labia folds. Jenn starts to leave the apartment with Alex captured in her pants. Angela walks by not knowing what is happening.

Characters:
Alex- medium height, 180lbs, blue eyes, brown hair, age 22;
Angela- medium height, 135lbs, brown hair, brown eyes, age 23;
Jenn- short height, 100lbs, blond hair, green eyes, age 26

Suggestions:
Interesting. I definitely like the sentence: ""HEY THERE LITTLE GUY, I HOPE YOU LIKE YOUR NEW LIFE SO FAR, YOU BELONG TO ME NOW. I THINK YOU WILL GET ALONG WITH THE OTHERS," All you want to think is ut-oh.

Character Count: 1,693 (tags = 173 Characters above this point)
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