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Greetings, Sara♥Jean


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First Impressions: "Invalid Item"  is a sort of existential poem, a before and after-type piece of writing, a poem that takes the unifying, life-giving force of water...and takes it to new heights.

We are given the basics at first; we all know water at its most basic; it preserves us, bathes us, nourishes us, is our caretaker. It is symbolic too, for this poem is more than about the more fundamental ideas and imagery of rainfall on windows.

Perhaps that is what makes this poem so beautiful to me to begin with; the author strikes out in trying to make this a basic, fundamental exercise in writing - and transcends it to greater and greater levels.

It truly is beautiful!



Overall Impact: We are treated to a great force within all of Nature; a thunderstorm. But it also transcends simple thunderstorms, this poem does. For we see now that what the person in the poem is undergoing is a transformation; a transforming of their world, their life, their soul.



Errors: While not an error, I do see raindrops and moisture in general as obeying the laws of gravity: SO...would it be more of a perspective of rationale that drops of water actually traverse downward.

Granted, in clouds, humidity travels UPWARD indeed; but coalescing on dust nuclei, I would say that all things eventually must travel downward. Mother Nature told me! *Laugh*



Summation: I enjoyed this poem for a variety of reasons: it was like taking part of a baptism of poetic spirit if you will, marked even by the consonance that this writer fit into the later verse as follows:

'...nature's own natural
purification of the soul.'

Nature's own natural is a stroke of genius in a sense, for we take consonance together with two words with identical starting letters. We could even use this as a sort of game whereby we use it in a riddle form:

"Nature is to natural as _____________ is to __________________. "

I'll let you English teachers fill that last one in for me!!

Keep writing!!!!!!!!!!! *Bigsmile*






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