Hello again, Zeke!

I love the wholeness of this poem, if you follow the direction of my thoughts. I mean, you begin with the sunrise and end with the sunset, so it's clear that your wife is the Alpha and Omega of your life, which you spell out quite clearly in the line 'You are my life.' There's no ambiguity in this poem; it's clear what you mean, and every technique employed in writing it points to how you worship your wife in thoughts and deeds.

I hesitate to suggest any changes because there's a beauty in this simplicity of this piece. I mean, you might consider a little more variation in sentence construction and vocabulary, since the same words and phrasese are repeated througout, but the repeated phrases add to the strength of the structure, so it's swings and roundabouts as to whether more complex and exact wording would actually improve this or not.

Thank you for sharing.

Best wishes,

Bob :D




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