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Hi Mare ~ extended hiatus ,I found your writing because we are both Newbies Academy Showcase members Aug. Hopefully this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
The title is an interesting choice since it is only one of the personality traits for Virgos. But it is one that draws attention to the piece so it is rather clever. Personally I don't know what to think about the whole zodiac personality business, but I like reading about it and occasionally I read about my own sign as well, just for fun. So I thought this was a nice subject to write about.

General impressions It's a good story with a very personal writing style that is appealing. You write swift paced and it shows you have a writing job. The only thing I missed was the last paragraph, or do i say the paragraph between the last one and your last sentence. It is a very abrupt ending to my taste and I am missing a piece. The last sentence comes out of nowhere. But that is easily fixed if you write a line or two more. Just a suggestion of corse.

Favorite Parts
It's funny-Virgo happens to be my astrological sign. I can confidently say that I am a true Virgo in every sense. Virgo is the sixth sign. Those born under this sign are typically relentless, stubborn and obsessive-compulsive. Our attention to detail is like no other. We are critical, picky, loyal (sometimes to a fault), compassionate, hardworking, analytical and practical all rolled up in a neat little ball. I chose the word neat for a reason. Virgos are meticulous-this is where the obsessive-compulsiveness comes in to play. If something is out of place, look out! We like things a certain way with no room for deviation.

It is a good start to introduce the zodiac sign Virgo. I would like to know in which period of the year this sign is, though. That's something I as a reader would love to know as to place it between the other 11 signs.

Final thoughts
All in all a nice read, and an excellent write. Too abrupt an ending, but that is doable. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive