Hello WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024 !

I am your local and frolicking SB here. I'm reviewing today on behalf of the Simply Positive group. I hope this review gives you a little bit of sunshine for your day.

Below is my review of your item beginning with Corrections:

Corrections/Suggestions
First impression- So, this another poem of yours and I love the changes I've noticed in your poetry. With that said, the italics part I think that you are using that to set us up for how much time can happen compared to a literal 'blink of an eye.'

This seems to be free verse structure so no need to follow a set pattern, syllable count, rhyme scheme, etc. I like the edginess of this poem as you talk about different things and how these well-known men have died by now.

Rhyming/Rhythm

The rhyming/rhythm is kept consistent and I didn't notice any 'extra' words within here to tinker with. It flows easily from one point to the next and you don't have any parts where there are a lot of syllables dropping back down to very few. Which can cause a kind of 'choppiness' effect so this was just right with the flow of your poem.

Things Which I Enjoyed
had to learn on occasion
live, forget aging
drown with regret
including reflections.

I really enjoyed the above lines but this whole poem was a lot of fun and thought provoking to read from start to finish. I like the darkness and how this poem causes us to look at ourselves with the passage of time and what it means to us to leave through all these experiences happening and disappearing within a blink of an eye.

Overall Comments
Overall, it has been a real pleasure reading and seeing your poetry change and shape with all the poems you've been writing.

My one thing was maybe the italics part threw me off a little? But I thought this was more emphasis on the passage of time and how it appears and disappears in a blink of an eye. I hope this little review of mine is helpful. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing!



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .