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Hi Schnujo is Late to Lannister ,I found your writing as part of the I Write Challenge. Hopefully this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
Great title on a great prompt write on reverse psychology, the use of this new chewing gum that is breaking the effect of unwarranted affection. It was very funny although the add was in a serious voice. I had to smile all the way.

General impressions
The voice is talking to a broad audience taking its subject very serious. You can almost sense the big bucks and the research center that's behind this new product. The way you tackled this persuasion is genius. I totally believed this product. And a nice pun at the end as a little encore. Very nicely done.

Favorite Parts
Fish Breath Gum causes your breath to begin smelling like rotted three-day-old fish in just a matter of minutes. As soon as you begin to sense the date isn’t going as you’d hoped, but they don’t seem to be on the same wave length, just pop in a piece of our Fish Breath Gum and soon they’ll change their tune. Our patented technology allowed your breath to cover the distance of the table, no matter how large it may be. Your partner will soon be leaning back and realizing that they’ve been mistaken in their interest level in you. We guarantee our product is so strong, they won’t even be fantasizing about you in the privacy of their own bedroom. They’ll be completely turned off by you, but they’ll have no idea it was all in your plan so you can save you both the discomfort of having to tell them you only think of them as a friend. Fish Breath Gum guarantees results or your money back. If they ask you out again, we’ll even double your money back.

The heart of your piece were it's function is being explained. It's the right tone, the right words, you totally sold the gum to me.

Final thoughts
All in all a great story on a funny subject. I hope you win the contest. It is a great entry.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive