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 Review #4252653 |
| Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"  . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck! [Overall Impression] A bitter sweet story.  [Spelling Errors/Grammar] As I read your tale I found a plethora of errors along the way. I would suggest going over it to find them all. Here are few I found: Last meal would be nice, or at least not having a completely empty stomach h. No blood, oddly, but I suppose the water would be washed that away. Fine in the well worn woods in my house, but not as good in the unfamiliar mountain range.  [Suggestions] I would suggest re-reading your story again to catch all of the mistake that may have been made to make for a smoother read.  [Favorite line]After my ordeal with sitting, I knew standing was out of the question. My mind instantly shifted to survival. I loved how the characters mind switched to come up with a way to survive even though the odds are staked against him. [Ending Thoughts] I thought your story was well thought out, and the character was interesting. I found the story itself could have been an easier read if spaces had been included in the format you used. I also came across a few mistakes, and listed a few above. I enjoyed your story nevertheless, and found myself hoping your character made their way out of their ordeal. Well done!  
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