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| (4.5)| Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck! [Overall Impression] Interesting story with a surprising ending.  [Spelling Errors/Grammar] Both girls laughed as the sat on the edge of the pool that was glittering int he fading light.  [Suggestions] None other than fixing the minor error that I pointed out above.  [Favorite line]"We're always the 'good girls,'" The line above sets the reader up for an adventure along with the characters. We definitely know shenanigans are to be had for sure. [Ending Thoughts] Janie and Megan were written perfectly for this short shot. Your tale set the proper scene up of a night of fun and rebellion, with a hint of peer pressure that everyone has to deal with at some point. I just loved the ending, and it raised so many questions. Overall, it was a wonderful story, and if possible you could add more. I'd love to know what comes next for them. Well done!  
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