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| (4.5)| Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck! [Spelling Errors/Grammar] No errors that I could find.  [Favorite line]“So mortals, here is your first riddle. I come at night without being fetched, by day I am lost without being stolen. I am like a jewel, but, I am like no diamond. What am I?” I liked this line as I was stomped myself for a couple of minutes and could picture myself perfectly being asked the question.  [Ending Thoughts] I thought the story you told very interesting and captured my attention with the use of real places, not to mention the Authors note that went a long way into helping me pronounce and understand the way the names you used throughout the story were meant to sound. Caoimhin and Cliodhna reminded me greatly of Moulder and Scully. While I did enjoy the story, I felt the reaction at the end could have been fleshed out a little more. Being faced with ones death tends in my opinion bring out a lot of emotions, especially if I fail to answer something correctly I'll be dead. I'd show some form of nervousness, slight panic. However, as a whole, it was a good story. Well done!  
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