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Secret Cave Swim  [ASR]
"The crystal waters beckoned her, calling to her thirst, promising refreshment..."
by Schnujo is Late to Lannister
Review of Secret Cave Swim  
Review by Lonewolf
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck!




*Tools* [Spelling Errors/Grammar]
None that I could find.

*Pencil* [Ending Thoughts]
I felt there could have been more added to the story to flesh it out a bit more. While I did enjoy the story you have told for its wonderful descriptions and all of the detail added. I felt that could have been more added like dialogue. It felt like there was going to be more, but ended too soon. However, the image prompt was used well.





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