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| Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"  . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck! [Spelling Errors/Grammar] None that I could find.  [Favorite line]“Mari, I'll end this war by whatever means it takes. I swear it.” I liked the line above because of felt it really showed the determination Isidor had to end the war.  [Ending Thoughts] Wow, there was just so much packed into this story. I thought the mages were pretty interesting, though there wasn't much mentioned about the cave other than something minor, I felt it would have really helped if it was described a little more. The story as a whole was interesting especially with the different classes of mage. Hopefully, this is the beginning of a series, I think it would be cool to read more about this world of mages. Well done!  
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You responded to this review 08/23/2016 @ 2:42am EDT