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 Review #4252673 |
| Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest"  . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck! [Spelling Errors/Grammar] None that I could find.  [Favorite line]A ball of light broke the surface of the lake. It rose so the bottom of it barely touched the water, and floated toward his hiding spot. I really liked the line above because it was something that I could picture clearly and was well described.  [Ending Thoughts] An interesting take on the image prompt given. I thought the descriptions used within the story were pretty good. I did feel this could have been extended longer as this doesn't feel like a full story, but the prelude to something longer. I also thought there were an over abundance of commas used, which made me pause for no reason. Overall, it was a good story, and I hope you consider extending it. Well done!  
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You responded to this review 08/23/2016 @ 9:38am EDT