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Hello, I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering! It has been a pleasure to read and review your work, please remember any thoughts or suggestions written or implied in my review are based only on my opinion. Thank you for entering and Good Luck!




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None that I could find.


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I thought the story as a whole was interesting. I felt there could have been a bit more detail added to help flesh the story out more than what it is. The story itself seems to be told as if it is their last moments, but I would have liked to have more details of their surroundings, and more dialogue thrown in.




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