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Hi Façade of Alabaster ,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
I thought the title was a good one since you struggle in this poem with the meaning of life. It's sub line clarifies your thoughts.

General impressions
The presence of darkness,
because there is light.
The existence of evil,
because there is right.
Lies without truth, they would never exist.
It's because of the one, that the other subsists.

Very powerful start of the poem. I especially liked The essence is evil/because there is right. The strife to be right and to force that right onto others is what's causing a lot of evil.

For falsehood softens with a kiss.
While silken words conceal the hiss
Of serpentine duplicity.
Façade of cruel treachery.
It speaks into our weary hearts.
And pierces it with countless darts
Of doubt and fear, unfounding
all that we thought to be.
Subtle lies, confounding,
the shreds of reason we possess.
Our hopes and dreams, they quell- repress.

Very well put...I especially loved the first three lines. False pretense wounds deep.

The soul: A worthless entity?
Most prized thing of fantasy?
Our days are but an effigy
Of life before eternity.
Each hour a deep and poisoned cut
To show that each is void and forfeit.

This is the part where the poem is dark and full of doom. Sad but beautifully put.

The wasted moments, ill-spent hours
Unlived dreams and faded flowers.
Vestiges of fallen towers.
Empty, hollow, vacant years.
A flood of shed and unshed tears.
And thus Remorse becomes our friend.
Our confidante until the end.

This last stanza is the most beautiful to me. It's awful and a waste of time to let time slip through your fingers. But I think we all have these moments, those feelings. Having Remorse as your only friend is very sad indeed.

Final thoughts
All in all a very beautiful and strong poem. I loved its quick paced rhythm and its rhyme. But it's a gloomy and dark poem, full of deep felt emotions. I loved reading it. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive

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