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Pygmalion, a serial killer's weblog (1)  [18+]
First chapter: The Man
by WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024
Review by Bobbi
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello again, WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024 , and good evening. *Moon*

I'm sorry about the delay in your reviews—I took a night off, but I'm behind. August is running out before my eyes!

In any case, continuing to skip through your port, I found this item which appears to be the beginnings of a crime thriller (a genre which I love). This appears to be a solid start, but only a 'start', which is why I am rating this piece with four stars. Here, again, is my policy for rating and reviewing: "Bobbi's Rating and/or Reviewing Policy" . If you have any questions about your rate and review, please feel free to email me.


A few things I noticed as a reader:

What I really like about this piece is that it has a strong Thomas Harris feel to it (you probably know who he is, but if not, you know who Hannibal Lecter is *Wink*). Writing a weblog, which seems counter-intuitive to the sane mind who would think better of exposing any criminal actions, fits right in line with the dramatic mindset of the fictional serial killer (and perhaps real killers... I'm no profiler).

The only real problem to it is that there is no more... You stated that this is more like a prologue, and I have to agree with you there. I feel like I am left hanging until I know what Milan's next move is. I also wonder what he will say as the press and the police start to investigate the gruesome actions of a future killer of notoriety.

I didn't see any obvious typos pop out at me, so kudos there (I'm not in proofreading mode, either, so don't take my word solely on that). The format is also easy on my cruddy eyes, and that I appreciate. I give special consideration to those folks to put the effort in formatting so I don't have to squint.

In any case, I sincerely hope you follow up on this story. I'll favorite the Pygmalion folder. *Checkg*

Thank you for allowing me to review your piece. I'm just another reader and writer so use or discard any of my suggestions at your personal discretion. If you make changes and would like me to reassess your piece, feel free to e-mail me. *Mail*

Keep writing and keep improving! *ThumbsUpL*

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