Hello!

I just read this narrative poem. Yes, fighting is not the way out. I like the wonderful example of Giant Joe’s story.. Tiny boy Joe lived with his mother and his mother called him “Giant Joe”. This made Tiny Joe very proud. Joe’s mother teaches him the value of life.

Here you focused on the positive side of life. The tone of this poem is quite. I like the little rhyming. The picture you are painting here is beautiful.

You have used punctuation marks where they are needed.

My favorite lines: “So you see kids learn from this
And be nice to everyone
If someone is being mean to you
Don't let them think they've won”

I enjoyed reading. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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