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 The Drover's Son  [E]
Poetry about a farmer battling the elements of the land
by Marnie Jane Cavazzi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Marnie Jane Cavazzi


This is your local Simply Positive Reviewer, here! Your writing has been selected for review, as part of Simply Positive's mission to bring more light on Authors here at WDC!

First Impressions: "The Drover's Son"  is a rhyme-style poem that has captured my heart; I grew up on farms, I worked hard on them, I listened to farmers speak of tough times and times of a-plenty. There is no job more at the mercy than that of agriculture, and no job more noble than one that feeds God's peoples the world over either.

If only there were more respect for farmers worldwide....

This poem struck home for it was a poignant rhyme and reason for the life of a son who, in tender remembrance of his father, finds himself deep in a terrible Australian drought. To wit, the weather has driven many of his friends away from their livelihoods and soon, if the weather does not change, will drive him away as well...



Overall Impact: I have read this newbie's writing before, and I have always come away impressed by her abilities.

I am yet again impressed by what I read here.

There is a wealth of flow to this poem, there is a large number of visuals tied in with emotional descriptives. We have boundaries here too, with a balance of the drought and with the evident rainfall that saves this young man's life.



Errors: This poem has neat four line boundaries, each with a rhyme for the line two lines above/below.

Somehow, just past half way through this poem, we discover this neat format has been kind of abandoned in two of the stanzas...

All in all, there isnt a huge amount to correct, just a structural change that might need addressing here...



Summation: A good poem, written from the heart, about the plight of a young Australian farmer who in the face of terrible drought calls upon his father's memory and is able to triumph after all...

KEEP WRITING!!!!




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