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Awaiting Sleep  [ASR]
A poem about the time between bedtime and sleep
by Schnujo is Late to Lannister
Review of Awaiting Sleep  
Review by Bobbi
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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'Ello, Schnujo is Late to Lannister and good afternoon! *Delight*

First of all, congrats on being one of Newbie Academy's showcased members of August! *Greetl*

I saw that this piece was a winner in "Game of Thrones" , and I'm rather surprised that it hasn't received any reviews yet. Sooo, I'm the first! WOO-HOO! *Delight* This poem appears to be written in solid free-form and makes good use of the prompt words, which is why I rated the item with four stars. Here is a link to my rating and reviewing policy for your reference: "Bobbi's Rating and/or Reviewing Policy" . If you have any questions on my rate and review, please feel free to drop me a line. *Notepad**Pencil*


A few things I noticed as a reader:

Who hasn't had those sleepless nights where your mind races on the proverbial hamster wheel while you look at the clock and notice that if you fall asleep right now, you can still get a couple of hours? *Clock* All you want to do is just get a little shut-eye and wake up refreshed for a change—your brain, however, just wants to bounce from one piece of useless nonsense to the next. Night after night, it's the same battle. *Sleeping*

Your tone is clear and your wording is vivid, so well done there. *Thumbsupl* Like I said, it's a short three-stanza poem that doesn't seem to use any rhyming scheme or set form. I'm glad that it received a placing in GoT—it's one of the better entries for those week-long writing challenges. *Wink*

Thank you for allowing me to review your piece. I'm just another reader and writer so use or discard any of my suggestions at your personal discretion. If you make changes and would like me to reassess your piece, feel free to e-mail me. *Mail*

Keep writing and keep improving! *ThumbsUpL*

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