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This so reminded me of my oldest son when he was six and took up the trumpet.

I love your whole first verse. I was going to go line by line and then just fell in love with the whole verse. I love the 'fingers are color worn'. Very nicely put.

The only spot that threw me was 'just ask him' but then didn't tell us who the 'him' was.

The 'locked loose' threw me a bit. Maybe a puckered, or cheeks compress or something? lol
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Love, LinnAnn
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