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Hello again, Self-Asylum (Nichole Sauve).
This is a Simply Positive Review! *ScallopB*


*DropB* I enjoyed the serenity of this poem. Rain can evoke so many feelings within a person's psyche. Some people relate it to tears and sadness, a day that is grey and cloudy, thus melancholy comes with it. It can also bring a certain joy to another person. Rain is the washing of nature, refreshing everything around it. Also, it is celebrated as bringing bountiful blooms and garden produce, thus making the farmers and gardeners delight at its sight.

*Rain* Then, there is the individualistic approach to the falling droplets. Dancing in the rain, walking through the woods where the trees act as umbrellas with their leaves, yet allow trickles to form and splatter down upon the hiker. So many beautiful songs and stories as well as poems are born from the rain.

*Wand* Your poem had a melodious flow, as a tiny brook coasting over the rocks. It splashes with vibrancy when needed for emphasis, quiets to a whisper as well, for a peaceful fit of the tapestry.

I loved these words:

"The surface of small ponds celebrate,
As tiny splashes waltz quickly upon them,
Rippling soundless festive vibrations,"

*DragonflyR* A beautiful blend to tease the mind's eye and the pluck of the chords of the ears, like a harp.

Observation

*Magnify* If there is one word I did not enjoy fully, it would be the use of the word "plops."

"Ending each fall in small stifled plops."

*GlassesB* For some reason, it detracts from the harmony of the rest of the poem's well-woven words upon my senses. I only seem to relate plops with living near farmlands and cows when I was a kid. But then, that could just be my childhood memories of how the word was used. *Laugh* Nevertheless, ending a line with plops is just not the best choice. I guess the two rhyme lines could be reworded so that another rhyme word is used at the end of it. I'll just leave that up to you. I am perhaps the only one who had an issue with "plops."


Otherwise, beautifully scribed! *TeaB*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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