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Hi Izzy's Writing ,I found your writing at your request. Hopefully this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
Title and sub line are helpful to this story. You could try a different title for each chapter, that's up to you of course.

General impressions
A nice second chapter to the first one I read. I recognized a lot of it from the first chapter. Make sure they don't look too much a like, there is a lot of overlap: the way the girl reacts to the brothers, the way the brothers are worried for their sister. Not the fact that it is the same but the responses are almost identical, you have to be careful not to bore the reader with too much overlap. Try to come up with different words for giggling and chuckling.

Favorite Parts
“What Jordon did was rude, inappropriate, and unacceptable. Especially when it is done to a three-year-old girl who is having a hard enough time as it is with her autism. This needs to be addressed: wither it’s someone on the other team, your own teammate or your own family member: if they have autism and you make fun of them for it, then you are an idiot. If you want to trash talk someone on another team, that’s fine. But do NOT trash talk them for having autism. If I hear someone doing that, my team or the other team, I will make sure they get kicked out the league. And no, I am not just saying it because of Niklas’s sister, I have someone in my family who has it. And they were made fun of and things almost ended very badly for them. But they got helped and realized that they were perfect just the way they were. So I don’t want to hear about anyone in this locker room making fun of Izzy or anyone else that has autism. Because they will get kicked off the team.”

Great speech, but is this speech not coming too soon? Only after one indiscretion of Jordan. Maybe there has to be more incidents to have a realistic response like this?

Suggestions
The sentence.."He never realized how much autism could affect a family..he knew now that's for sure. Maybe you should throw in some examples? Now the only "unusual' thing that is described is the flapping with the arms. I am sure there are more examples of how autistic behavior can affect a family.

The notation **Time lapse ** is in my eyes unnecessary.

Final thoughts
A nice sequel to the first chapter. Read them one after the other to make sure there isn't too much overlap in responses of the characters.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive