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Hi John Yossarian ,I found your writing at the Please Review page. Hopefully this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
Fashionista is a nice title for this short story. The sub line clarifies the content, plot and setting. I was intrigued so I started to read.

General impressions
A rather nice story on a young designer entering a competition to work on a show. The start is very promising with the note on the door. The description of the neighborhood before entering the building was highlighting a sense of suspense: what's behind the door? I was a bit disappointed when the rest of the story unfolded, rather normal like and not an unpleasant read but far from exciting. Then she gets picked to enter and I am on the edge of my seat again. And after that it's a horror scene: with the dogs as a reminder what will happen if the main character is not making a suit out of her partner for the day. She has the scissors in her hands to do the job. It made me smile, it was certainly a surprise ending, but also a very unrealistic one and frankly I didn't buy it. Perhaps if you are expanding that horrific ending a bit more, adding some details then I would have no hesitation in believing the end. Now it just came out of nowhere. It is not believable a mere contest would turn a rather decent girl into a murderer for no other reason than a voice telling her to become one.

Favorite Parts
"Each of you will be required to make an outfit with your partner. There are no guidelines as to style so let your imaginations run free."

My eyes scanned the room more carefully. There was a basket with scissors, needles, and thread, shears on the table. A dress form and a sewing machine were in one corner and hanging above a sink on the wall near the door, an hand-ax, a hammer and a weird 'D' shaped saw, like my grampa used to have in his shop. I didn’t see any material.

"At the end of the forty-eight hours, each team will be judged by our panel of experts. Once the winner is determined he or she will move on to the semi-finals and a $100,000 grand prize."

I wasn't sure if they could hear me but I saw the cameras were following us as we paced the room. "There's no material," I shouted. "What do we make the outfits from?"

"Why, you make outfits 'out of' your partner." The voice said.

This is the heart of your story, this is what it's all about.

Suggestions
The psychology of the main character is not that well developed that it is to be imagined she'd kill for the money. Maybe if you set some more pointers in the story that she would do such a thing I might believe the ending.

Final thoughts
All in all a nice story with a great but unbelievable ending. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive