Sprocket [E] A steampunk tinker helps her employer win the big race--300 words |
I loved this! I remember you messaging me and telling me you were entering a flash fiction contest and the prompt was Steampunk. I found this item in your port and figured it may be the one we were talking about. You had a couple loveable characters, the smart and meticulous personal assistant, who was also employed as a steampunk tinker for her boss, to help him win the big race, and the forgetful genius boss, who needed his tinker more as a daily assistant to keep him on track. She kept the sprockets tuned for his airship, or so it would seem . Observations "but in time she came to understand that it was the price of his genius[,] and that, she admired more than anything." Needed a comma before "and" because it separates the next clause from running into it. (genius and that) Thus: "genius, and that, she admired." I think I know this because I have been imprisoned with the comma queen, Winnie Kay in the "Lucky Bones Game." Anyway, this was not bad for a Steampunk quickie, with some prompt words needing to be woven in, also. You made them fit nicely! Well done! Until next time--write on! Regards, WebWitch My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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