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I'm doing a challenge in "a very Wodehouse challenge"  and one of the tasks is to send reviews to submitted entries in "Invalid Item"  contest. This is a well written prelude to great horror story. I like how you approached to the image prompt. The beginning was very nice and imaginative. I could feel the leaves gathering in the crevices. There's always something scary in those shortcut roads as if it is part of the crime as well. Like, it drags you in, you mentioned it as well. Now when I read about it here I realize that I've never thought of it this way before.

So, Charlie is some kind of a killer here. I wonder how he looks like and why he's doing it. I love the mystery in this short story and it also makes me wonder what happened between a girl and the person she was with before he left her alone there. And on top of it you came up with more mystery, having her engraving R.H. into one of your steps. I could totally imagine this scene and it makes me want to know more about her, about Charlie, about R.H. everything. I hope you'll come back to this some day and expand the story. Thank you for sharing your writing with me. All smiles.. *Smile*


~Minja~
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