I just read your poem "Sacred Place's Beware" , which I found when I hit 'read & review' I also want you to know that I realize for some, poetry is a very personal experience, and some criticism can be taken personally.

Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Sacred Places Beware indeed. You never know what's going to happen when you disturb the dead, especially in a deliciously dark poem. Death comes as a surprise and takes what's his.


Conventions:

This poem has a rhyme scheme of abab up until the last verse which ends in aa, each line is also done in 10 syllables.

The poem has a good rhythm thanks to the syllable count and flows really well from beginning to end.

Suggestions:

The only suggestion I have is a hard one, this particular line doesn't fit with the rest of the poem:



"peck" is the odd man out but I'm with you, I don't know what else could go there to help the poem flow as well as it does. It was just the one word that stood out and distracted from the rest of the poem.

Oh and I think you meant for the last word to be "sight" not "site"


Favorite Parts:

Actually I enjoyed the poem as a whole, starting out with acts done undercover to being secretly busted out by the grim reaper himself-- just desserts!


Additional Comments:

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