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Hi John Yossarian ,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
A very good title Problem Child and a good sub line. It was a meet at school with the mother of a pupil. It brought back some not so pleasant memories of a bad encounter with a pupil of mine years ago. But your pupil took it all to the very next and final level: murder. A very good and thrilling story.

General impressions
A great story starting real innocent like with the meet at the school of the teacher and a mother. The teacher suspects abuse and is totally wrapped up with the idea of the mother being abused by the husband. The description of the disturbing drawings of the child makes it even more believable. The husband is an evil man, the reader thinks. Then the end comes as a very big surprise, not the husband, but the child is the abuser. A great turn of events, although the appearance of the janitor made me suspicious something was about to happen in the empty school, late at night.

Favorite Parts
Gail picked up the top drawing and studied it. The sketch depicted a figure wearing a red shirt and blue pants dangling by the neck from from a barren tree. She gingerly set the drawing down and picked up a second sheet. On this one, a dog lay on the pavement of a road, red crayon poured from its anus and mouth. Beads of sweat dotted the woman’s forehead as she picked up the third drawing, then a fourth.

Gail fingered through a fifth drawing, this one depicting two people sitting on chairs. One of the people in the sketch had no head and a fountain of red sprouted from the neck.”

Great description of the drawings. I could envision them perfectly. Adding to the suspense that something really was wrong here. But the focus is on the husband, not the child itself.

Suggestions
One thing though: when Gail is severed from the neck down, she is still watching the boy, that would be an impossibility. It just is a bit too unrealistic, but you could easily change that with one added line or something, changing the POV from Gail to an omniscient writer.

One thing: The sketch depicted a figure wearing a red shirt and blue pants dangling by the neck from from a barren tree. The double 'from' must be one too many?

Final thoughts
All in all a great story with a lot of thrilling story lines and perspectives. I loved reading it. Thanks for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive