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Hi pinkbarbie,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
The title and sub line were okay and did fit its content. Although it really wasn't a story about the panther itself, only in the last line. Somewhere into this story I was a bit confused as to what this panther was, was it a human being or a real animal? Because of your line: The Black Panther was another burglar folks of the town made a big deal about. When the boyfriend turned up I thought maybe he was that burglar. But then, in the end, I read of the actual animal leaping to the boyfriend.

General impressions
A story about a particular girl with a nasty streak (teasing the sister, having all those ridiculous notions about skin compression during the night) and her thoughts about a black panther roaming the town. Because of my confusion about this black panther, I didn't appreciate the story as much as I could.

Strangely enough, because I didn't like this main character much, I didn't care much about her thoughts and what was about to happen to her or her boyfriend. To me, this was not a likable character. Did you mean that to be so?

Favorite Parts
Lydia, standing beside Joan's bed, grabbed the newspaper. "How do you survive without watching or reading the news? I didn't bring you the newspaper for you to fall asleep. This is real." She waved the black and white newsprint in the air. "This is happening now, in our town."

I thought the sister was the sensible one and I liked her better, not the main character.

Suggestions
I don't know really how to change this but you could make this main character more likable and therefore more interesting to the reader in as much she is a believable character with thoughts and actions that matter to the reader.

Final thoughts
All in all a story that is a bit wasted on me, sorry to say. I want to like this main character more so I would be intrigued or at least interested in what is happening to her and her boyfriend. But I am more interested in the little sister. And she left the scene. But thank you for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive