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Greeting the Ex-  [13+]
Tonight he’d tried to make good on his promise; if I he couldn’t have me, no one would
by Schnujo is Late to Lannister
Review of Greeting the Ex-  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Helllo there, Schnujo is Late to Lannister
This is a Simply Positive Review! *CoffeeT*


*Tempcold* Wow, you certainly know how to pack a ton of story in an ounce of words, that's for certain.Yet you accomplished this almost effortlessly -- at least from the reader's point of view. Smooth as silk, kiddo! *DropR*

*Poison* This story is huge because it paints a vivid, albeit frightening picture of this character and her relationship with her Ex. The first line pulls the reader in and she is struck by what has just happened. She remains fixated on what she realizes is the truth, all the way until the very end.


Observation:

"Tonight he’d tried to make good on his promise, that if I he couldn’t have me, no one would."

*PoliceCar* The ending was deliciously satisfying! Great horror short, that is a reality to far too many women. The dark subject matter can't help but grab a reader's attention right from the start, especially with the frozen peas. Nice addition, by the way.


Good work! *Rabbit3*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch



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