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SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  (E) A group whose mission is to spread positivity. #1384154 by Simply Positive

Hello Survivor48

This is a beautiful, heartfelt poem about how inspiring and helpful good parents can be. I hope you've been able to share these words with your parents because I'm sure it would mean the world to them to see what you have written about them. We all need strong role-models in our lives and it certainly sounds like you have them in your parents.

In your first three lines you have the word 'when' twice and also 'whenever'. This repetition maybe a little jarring for some readers. I think if you wanted to edit this poem a little you could change the second line slightly to remove the word 'when'. May I suggest something along the lines of 'And I felt confused, my parents took my hand'. Of course this is merely a suggestion.

I think this is a great, positive poem. Write on!

Best wishes,
Mark


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