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______________________________________________________________________ DISCLAIMER I am not a professional editor or critic. All the opinions in the following review are just that; opinions. ______________________________________________________________________ Hello, I stumbled across this item while looking for things to review for one of my groups, and I thought I would drop by to leave some notes. Overall I think this was a great piece. It was short, but it carried a strong emotional impact and the sentiment behind it was really, really beautiful. This is a great way to show appreciation for the people who brought you up. Thank you for sharing it with the site - it's always nice to find these heart-warming poems. The one thing that I would suggest is rephrasing the opening couple. When I was lost on the street of life, My parents took my hand when I was confused. Because of the word when being used at the beginning and end of the sentence, this just felt a little awkward to me, and I had to pause to think about it. Not a huge deal, just a small suggestion to an otherwise flawless piece. Great job! I'd be happy to read more of your work at any time. All the best, -Cat ______________________________________________________________________ ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ______________________________________________________________________ My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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