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Review by April Sunday
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Nov 15, 2016 Tues.

Dear Mari McKee,

Presentation of bold with triangular paragraphs add to the allure of THE MIDNIGHT DANCE. The story you convey in less than 2,000 words is well done, and passes for a very appropriate tale from Vampire Genre.

IN SUM ---

Take -- Valentia -- good character name. Well defined traits of selfish behavior -- bordering on "evil."

Add --- Lord Nelson --- an indulgent father

Then as readers already are aware of Valentia's true desire

Enter and exit with explanation sentences --

RE: Lord Chastain.

Not only does Mari McKee enter this short story into

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She also enters a poem.

Thank you, Mari McKee -- I enjoyed your story.

Signed teffom@writing.com


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