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Hi River ,I found your writing because you are the Showcase of the month. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
I liked your title and it was the one thing that made this story in the comedy genre. The subtitle clarified things a bit, although the main event was the giving blood. Since I also have to give blood every 4 months and my veins are extremely difficult to find too I enjoyed this read very much. You always hope for a nurse that knows how to inject, but you never are quite sure, are you...some nurses do a better job than others.

General impressions
A smoothly written piece on an early morning where the writer has to give blood before even having a decent cup of coffee. I loved the extremely realistic part of giving blood. The reader was there giving blood also, with a struggling nurse. Really a horror scenario.

Favorite Parts
She tied a rubber strap above where she planned to drive the needle into my vein, scrubbed an alcohol soaked gauze over the area then looked at me and said, “Just take a deep breath and take it easy.”

As I inhaled deeply I felt the prick of a very sharp needle enter my vein and immediately tensed up as it popped out again. She began moving the needle around under my skin twisting it this way and that trying to get it back into the vein. Then she muttered under her breath and withdrew the needle and stuck a piece of gauze and a band-aid over the hole in my arm.

After two more attempts, she decided to try one of the larger veins on the top of my hand. She stared at me menacingly and said “Like I told you before, just take a deep breath and take it easy.”

Very well written, I can feel the needle go into my own arm. Yikes! The sharp pain and the ordeal you go through while dealing with a nurse who cannot find your vein is horrifying.

Suggestions
No grammar or spelling errors found. There is no need for italics in the last two paragraphs, so you better lose that.

Final thoughts
All in all a very nice read of a real and realistic situation I totally can identify with. The coffee and the donut must have tasted like heaven afterward. Thank you for sharing.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive