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Hi bobric,I found your writing because I reviewed chapter 1,2,3, and 4. Hopefully, this review will find you in good spirit.

On Title/Subject
I thought the Title and subtitle were not the right ones. You are probably focusing on what is yet to come, but I the reader don't know that yet. So I would suggest you find another title and subtitle. Your choice, of course. Because why is this a trap for Tommy's parents? Perhaps your next chapter will tell me that but so far all that's happening is that the parents are curious about the home life of Stephen, the new boy in the life of their son.

General impressions
Another fine chapter where you introduce the parents of Tommy and how they reacted to Stephen. The dialogs again are realistic, adding to the suspense of what is next.

Favorite Parts
Henry knew how Alice’s day was going to be. She’d teeter-totter through it until getting exhausted and then let her subconscious decided. It didn’t matter what he suggested or how he tried to help. “Think about it, Alice. I’ll be home at the usual time. Got to go.” The title office was swamped. The call forwarding button on his phone was blinking like mad. He stabbed at it and all thoughts of ugly little boys faded from his mind.

Alice couldn’t stop thinking. Vacuuming and washing the morning dishes only seemed to agitate her thoughts. “Maybe if I go over and introduce myself. That boy said his mother didn’t work.” It seemed a simple enough thing to do. Maybe it would shed more light on the situation. Alice should really meet the lady if both boys were going to be seeing each other often.

Good introduction of how Tommy's mom and dad's relationship is and the next step of Tommy's mom.

Suggestions
You lost me again with: Mary spent the day and Bryan King’s money having a ball floating from shop to shop to bill collector making them all smile. This sentence is not flowing, perhaps you should look at it again?

Final thoughts
Another good chapter in the sequel. Since I've come this far in reading I want to finish your other chapters too, I am that curious in reading about the rest of the story. But I will do so at a later day this week. Thanks for sharing so far.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive